Walt: write a story in sequence.
Yesterday was the big jump. Chris wanted to break the world's biggest fear fall. He was really scared because he was going to spring into space and zoom down to earth.
Chris and his ground crew zoomed straight to England to execute the worlds biggest jump. The helium balloon carried Chris all the way up into the galaxy where you cannot hear a thing.
He was just about to spring into space. Chris was extremely terrified he felt like he was going to faint. When he jumped he just felt like he was gliding on air. When Chris was going to land on earth his visor were really foggy he couldn’t see anything. Luckily he quickly wiped his visor and he landed perfectly like he had planned.
Chris had a lot of guts to jump from out of space. His crew asked him “was it a lovely trip down?”. Everyone said he had the speed to zoom really fast.
Chris had landed really safe onto the ground. Everyone was amazed that he made it down really safe. He was proud of himself for taking the helium balloon up into space and jumping out of it.
The message is about doing something crazy and believing in yourself.
I enjoyed your story a lot. You have used a lot of expensive words in it that made it very interesting. How did you react when you heard Felix jump from space?
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